- Partage ce devoir avec tes amis !
Sujet du devoir
J'ai fait 300 mots .Plan : introduction , développement ( 2 axes différents ) et conclusion .
Je pense que il y a des fautes qui m'échappe , je vous demande de bien vouloir me les faire parvenir s'il vous plaît ( enfin si vous arriver à les trouver).
Merci.
Où j'en suis dans mon devoir
(Intro )The TV is a media who is used by a lot of people .The TV has a aim ! it is to communicate and spread several informations , some piece of news which are importants for people .
However , the TV permets also to entertain people but it is sometimes dangerous ...
So , TV is educational ?
In first time , we will show that the TV is a educational tool .
Then that she represents also a danger for some people .
The TV can be a educational tool , for example thanks an educative programmes like televison game show ( " question for a champion ") or historic reportage ("berlin wall") .
Moreover , for children there are some programmes which are very good fot them development .
Some programmes are very instructive for children . In fact , they learn to speak , to say news words , also the modern language like " english " for example "dora the explorer "
The TV can also give some informations about the various news of the daily life with the TV news which is diffused at least three time a day.
But the TV is also dangerous .
She can provokes shocs for underage or for old people. Even if there are smetimes a symbol for band the children who have less than 10,12,16 or 18 yeras old.
An other example : some programes television are mind - numbing for young people (" reality - TV")
The TV can be dangerous for the young as like videos games , TV can them some unhealthy ideas ( violence , drug , sucide ...)
TV is factor obesity : she can make easier the taken of weight .
To finish , a lot of time in front TV can stopped dialog with family.
To conclude , the TV is a great tool for society . She permets communication , development or still amusement .
But TV can be dangerous like a drug .
The secret is that it don't to abuse her . Tv should consumate with moderation .
3 commentaires pour ce devoir
Merci beaucoup onylmas de m'avoir corriger !
Pour le verbe "consommer" je sais que cela ne se dit pas pour la télévision mais c'est pour donner un léger coté humoristique ( pour montrer que la télé est dangereuse au point d'être assimiler à une drogue ... alcool ... qu'il ne faut pas en abuser ) enfin pour moi cela ne me gêne pas .
En tous cas merci de ton aide , je me suis aperçu je j'ai fait des fautes bêtes (comme d'hab)!
Bye !
Pour le verbe "consommer" je sais que cela ne se dit pas pour la télévision mais c'est pour donner un léger coté humoristique ( pour montrer que la télé est dangereuse au point d'être assimiler à une drogue ... alcool ... qu'il ne faut pas en abuser ) enfin pour moi cela ne me gêne pas .
En tous cas merci de ton aide , je me suis aperçu je j'ai fait des fautes bêtes (comme d'hab)!
Bye !
De rien ! Oui, je comprends, ça fait un jeu de mot ^^
Ne t'inquiète pas, ça m'arrive souvent à moi aussi de faire des erreurs bêtes !
Ne t'inquiète pas, ça m'arrive souvent à moi aussi de faire des erreurs bêtes !
Ils ont besoin d'aide !
- Aucun devoir trouvé, poste ton devoir maintenant.
The TV has AN aim! It is to communicate and spread information, some piece of news which IS important for people.
However, the TV ALSO PERMITS to entertain people but it is sometimes dangerous ...
So, IS TV educational?
In first time, we will show that the TV is AN educational tool.
Then that IT ALSO represents a danger for some people.
The TV can be AN educational tool, for example thanks TO an educative programme like television game show ("Question for a champion") or historic reportage ("Berlin wall").
Moreover, there are some programmes FOR CHILDREN THAT are very good for them development.
Some programmes are very instructive for children. In fact, they learn HOW to speak, HOW to say news words, also the modern language like "English" for example with "Dora the explorer ".
The TV can also give some information about various pieces of news of EVERYDAY life with the TV news which is BROADCAST at least three times a day.
But the TV is also dangerous.
IT can SHOCK for underage or for old people. Even if there IS sometimes a symbol for band the children who ARE less than 10, 12, 16 or 18 years old.
HERE IS an other example: some television programmes are mind-numbing for young people ("reality-TV").
The TV can be dangerous for the young as videos games, TV can VERBE? them some unhealthy ideas (violence, drug, suicide ...).
TV is a factor of obesity: IT can make THE TAKEN OF WEIGHT easier.
To finish, a lot of time SPENT in front OF TV can STOP dialog with family.
To conclude, the TV is a great tool for society. IT permits communication, development or still amusement.
But TV can be AS dangerous AS a drug.
The secret is NOT TO WATCH IT TO EXCESS. TV should consummate with moderation.
Attention, les adjectifs ne prennent pas de S (important dans l'intro) et sont placés avant le nom (television programmes); information est singulier; fais attention, ce n'est pas "to permet", mais "to permit"; attention à l'orthographe, il y a beaucoup de fautes de frappe; les nationalités et langues prennent toujours une majuscule, les noms propres aussi; on utilise it, its et which pour les objets, et non she, her et who; et fais attention au placement de "also".
Pour les questions, il y a toujours inversion sujet-verbe. La vie de tous les jours se dit "Everyday life". On utilise le verbe "to be" pour parler de l'âge.
Je ne comprends pas ce que tu entends par "still amusement" dans la conclusion… Et je n'utiliserais pas "consommer" pour la télé, mais c'est personnel.
J'espère t'avoir aidée !