Synthèse en Anglais idée de progrès pour demain

Sujet du devoir

Bonjour j'ai fait ma synthèse en Anglais sur idée de progrés et je voulais savoir s'il y a des fautes s'il vous plaît , est-ce que vous pourriez me corriger . Et merci d'avance pour votre aide.

Voici ma synthèse :

The notion I am going to talk about is the notion of idea of progress . This notion talk about the exploration , the discovery , the new technology like the creation of satellites for example created by scientifics . It’s possible that it is a changing , a development also . However I am going to speak on the space exploration especially through the speech of Kennedy during the Cold War , and I am going to talk about the discovery of the conditions of life on the planet Mars by the intermediary of a 

robot . The Nasa has created 10 technologies which will talk about. And also of Albert Einstein and Galileo briefly. And risks and advantages of space exploration .

We will answer at the question : Does the exploration of space and the discoveries of scientists and of Nasa allow the idea of progress ?

To begin with I will speak about the space exploration , then I will speak of discoveriers of news technologies by the scientists and the Nasa and the risks and advantages of the space exploration .

To start I will speak about a text we worked in class . This text speak about the creation from the telescope by Galileo . In this text we learn than before Galileo the cosmos was believed to consist on 5 planets and than the people thought than the Earth was at the Center of the Universe but they have discover than it’s was false . And the people thought than the Earth was flat . With the telescope there has been a breakthrough in technology to see a space , with the telescope we can see hundreds of stars , mountains on the Moon like say Galileo . In my view it's a magnific invention because it allow to discover the space more precisely that before . After Galileo there have been news things discovered and today there are always news things discoveries . In my view the progress in unstoppable , still going on , we can not stop progress ... We seen also a other text on the planet Mars where a robot was launched by the Nasa to see if this planet is habitable or no and so the condition environmental of this planet . The Nasa launch a robot on Mars also to know if he has water for the Earth because there will have risk of lack of water in a few years.

This other text it's a article , a webpage who is pulled of a website , this text was writen in 2011. The robot named Nasa's Viking 1 , it's the first robot to have land on Mars . In my opinion this planet will could useful for the future because of the climate warming , if this situation continue we should to go on Mars maybe ...

In his speech during the Cold War , Kennedy talks about William Bradfort who has created the Plymouth Bay Colony that was an english colonial company who is in América from 1620 at 1691 because she was established in América . She had created by a group of Puritan Separatists . It's the secondly colony create by the English in América . Moreover in his speech Kennedy said than all humans search the knowledge and progress and than the humans are determined and so they don't give up . The humans explore the world and too the moon and the space , and finally the planets around ...Kennedy said too than the exploration of the moon is a hope for the peace and the security , who requiere a effort very important . It's in my view not easy to go on the moon , it's hard , because it's a challenge for the world , the América would like win and they will get there because on the 3 persons who were in the Eagle , there are Neil Amstrong the first man to take a walk on the moon's surface . The 2 others persons who are participed at the mission are Aldrin and Collins .

In my opinion this progress unstoppable can to be a good thing because that allow the creation of new technology and to live better . And allow discover the moon for example . But it's progress can to be a problem because it's possible than Kennedy would like created a colony on the moon . 

Now I am going to speak on the news discoveries

made by NASA and scientists. The Nasa created for example artificial limbs , she has found a way in robotics in order to remotely control space vehicles . The Nasa created the water purifier by recicling the sweat and urine for than astronauts can to access at supplies of drinking water . She has created too adjustable smoke detectors for than astronauts can to detect there are fire in case of emergency . Nasa created also satellite for the weatter forcast , for the mobile phone , the tele communication . Nasa created as freeze-dried food , an technique that was utilised during the Second World War , the food they created retained almost all of its nutrition . There are blankets that was created to retain heat and than we use always in 2019 . There are mattress that molds to the shape of a warm body is made from a polyurethane-based foam . Nasa has created tyres for the parachute to help the persons during the landing because tyre is a material more resistant . There are too the creation of cordless vacuum cleaners and the creation of the world's fastest swimsuit . 

There are Galileo who has created things , he is a mathematicien , a phisicist , an astronomer ... has created a telescope that allow see news things .

There are also Albert Einstein who is a physicist , a player of violin , an artist , a mathematicien , a scientist ; it's the crazy scientist . He oppose imagination and logic , the imagination don't have rules . In my opinion the imagination is better than knowledge but with the knowledge we know more things that with the imagination , the imagination is limited.In conclusion there are a lot of creations , the progress develop quickly with the creation of satellites for example .

To finish I am going to speak about the risks and advantages of the space exploration .

First of all the advantages of the space exploration are than we can discover space(stars , planets similar at the Earth , the moon ...) , life maybe on a new planet in the future , jobs are created like astronauts , astronomers , scientists , physicists ... There are robotics and technologies that are created and reinforce this idea of progress .

The risks are than it's dangerous , the astronauts don't see theirs families during theirs missions, it's expensive too because for the differents equipments , it is necessary than the astronauts have supplies (water and food ) for the travel , it's negative only very rich people will be able to afford a trip to Mars , and also because there are risks to die sometimes 

of hunger and thirst and to die something else .It's in my opinion a terrible end because we aren't with our family and we can to die without returning one last to see his family.

To conclude the exploration of space and the discoveries by the Nasa and scientists allow the progress , in a différent way but the progress it's too to earn news things like the fact than the Earth is round and not flat . So news knowledge .

Où j'en suis dans mon devoir

Merci beaucoup de votre aide .