2ème parties de ma dissertation d'anglais

Publié le 28 oct. 2010 il y a 13A par Anonyme - Fin › 1 nov. 2010 dans 13A
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Sujet du devoir

with all the evidence we have seen previously we could say that France has a good judicial system but we also know that prison minor offenders alongside the great crime! Do you find logical that a young man who stole a gold ring offer price for his girlfriend is in the cell m ^ me to a man who killed his wife? I find it shameful, since major criminals can influence the petty criminals! take the example of someone who uses drugs hard and succeeded in infiltrating into the prison, if that person shares the same cell as another who has never touched, do you think that he clenched tried to use it? So for me, prison is a school of crime! are now talking about prison life. Today, we hear everywhere that the prison are very poorly maintained! Did you know that there is a prison suicide every three days! and I think it's the conditions that push them to do this act! At the beginning of my essay I say that France is abolished the death penalty but I think life imprisonment is also removing a life! there is a phrase well known to say: "we all have the right to a second chance" and I completely agree with that!

Où j'en suis dans mon devoir

voilà ce que j'ai écris et je voudrais savoir si il y a des fautes car je ne suis pas très fortes en anglais...



1 commentaire pour ce devoir


Anonyme
Posté le 28 oct. 2010
Bonjour 1s2,

Effectivement il y a quelques petites fautes mais sinon c'est bien écrit:

"With all the evidence we have seen previously we could say that France has a good judicial system but we also know that JAIL minor offenders alongside the great crime! Do you find logical that a young man who stole a gold ring offer price for his girlfriend is in the cell to a man who killed his wife? I find it shameful, since major criminals can influence the ??petty?? criminals! Take the example of someone who CONSUMES HARD DRUGS and succeeded in infiltrating into the prison, if that person shares the same cell as another who has never touched, do you think that he clenched tried to use it? So for me, prison is a school of crime! Are now talking about prison life. Today, we hear everywhere that JAILS are very poorly maintained! Did you know that there is a JAIL suicide every three days! I think it's the conditions that push them to do this act! At the beginning of my essay I say that France is abolished the death penalty but I think life imprisonment is also removing a life! There is a phrase well known to say: "We all have the right to a second chance" and I completely agree with that!"

Cordialement,

Benjamin CNED 3ème

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