Essai -

Sujet du devoir

Bonjour ,

je dois faire un essai dont voici le sujet :
Do you think emigratibng to a new countruy is an enriching or a traumatising experience ?



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Où j'en suis dans mon devoir

For a long time, many people coming from India, Africa, East of Europe and other countries emigrate to Europe and United Kingdom which are the main shelters for immigrants.
Before they arrive, they are hopeful, later most of them are disappointed.
When they immigrate to a new country, they are searching for happiness, success, and also for some of them to live decently, to eat and could finally live in dignity. They want a good wage, great job and a house.
They think everybody has got the same rights, same luck. For example, when a foreigner comes in the United States, he wants to reach the American dream which is a good way of integrating society.
They are full of dream and believe strongly they can escape from poverty and misery.
Unfortunalety, most of them are aware of the disappointment and false hopes. They have to fight against poor living conditions, unemployment. Generally, they live underground and illegal because they are not regulated. They live in fear of being deported.
Foreigner meets also obstacles with religion. They are often not in right to openly practice their religion, they must adapt (for Muslims that’s difficult).
However, immigration can be the opportunity to discover a new culture and way of life.
As for as I am concerned, I’m a bit optimistic. I think with courage, strength, determination will and a bit of talent an immigrant can fulfill his dreams and earn his living.
To conclude, I think immigrating to a new country is globally a traumatizing experience. Most of people are not able to escape from poverty and don’t find happiness.
But some people arrive to fulfill their dream.
Nevertheless, that’s quite rare.