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Life appears as something sacred. Nothing can exceed the value of life. However, (CORRECTION = are there not ideas or (CORRECTION = fights which are worth (CORRECTION = us risking our life? Many of our war veterans, the soldiers of 1914 gave their life for the defense of the homeland and (??) at first saint Joan of Arc. Perhaps that the image is more effective than words. An idea may have more values than (CORRECTION J'AI enlevé le a) human life: for example a society may sacrifice individuals for a better life. Our society tends to value this behavior, I would even (CORRECTION = say they idealize it. Why: Because we live in a society which answers to certain morality, certain ethics, certain rules. We sacrifice our lives for several causes, several words: justice, morality, freedom, equality, love. People do not hesitate to die for a fight which they consider just. For example: the terrorists of September 11th in planes, the immolation by Iranian women, the Palestinian civilians who explode in Israeli control points. To die for an idea, a cause? I do not know if in France, many people could die for an idea, because finally, the worst it would be the prison and not the death penalty for opposition or the life imprisonment for example (CORRECTION = that still exist in so many antidemocratic countries. To die for a fight? I do not believe that the situation of France is (CORRECTION inverser enough et serious ) serious enough and inextricable to arouse the despair as it can be the case of some who are allowed recruit by currents (as the Palestinians) because they are worn by the energy of the despair. We can die if we are sure of a thing, it is easier to die to protect its homeland or somebody in particular, namely, something concrete, that to die for its ideas, its convictions .Because to decide to sacrifice (CORRECTION = himself or to risk one's life for an idea, it must certainly be (CORRECTION = of a strength and of an amplitude which will upset our life or which will defend, even after our death, values which we consider as noble. The opinion is a notion which deserves to be defended, even at the cost of our life, because (CORRECTION =it allows us to express the thoughts deeps and the values in which we believe. Few people in France are ready to die for their beliefs, except extreme cases for example a person who belongs to a sect. We can also take in example the kamikazes (who make it by faith, and not for lack of financial), who dedicate themselves to a sure death for the defense of an ideology which will influence their era … We can sacrifice its freedom or its life by love, either for its country. A man who (CORRECTIOn = loves his country and who wishes to defend it, if one day he has to go to war, it is that he has to sacrifice himself sooner or later, because very rarely we return living (CORRECTION =from war. If we sacrifice our life for our country, we also sacrifice our family. also By love we can sacrifice its life or its freedom because sometimes we are afraid of expressing our opinions, we do not want to hurt the person we love. I think that we can sacrifice its life for a cause such as the freedom for its country or another country. During the Second World War many immigrants from the countries of (ENLEVE =on et of) North Africa sacrificed their lives for France so that France is partially released, in particular the Senegalese infantrymen and of North Africa fought for the independence of France. This landing allowed the liberation of Provence. Finally, we can sacrifice its life for ideas for diverse reasons, the love, the justice, the morality, the freedom, the equality, the religion, the war. But, it is necessary to meet facing of an event to say if it would be possible to give its life for such or such reason.

Je ne comprends pas pourquoi tu utilises "its" constamment. Tu parles de qui ou quoi quand tu dis ça?

salut :)

is there any idea or fight worth risking our lives for? Many of our war veterans, the soldiers of 1914 gave their lives to protect their homeland and .. ? Perhaps images are more effective than words. An idea may have more value than a human life: for example a society may sacrifice individuals for a better life. Our society tends to value this behavior, I would even say to idealize it. Why: Because we live in a society which answers to a certain morality, certain ethics and certain rules. We sacrifice our lives for several causes, several words: justice, morality, freedom, equality, love. People do not hesitate to die for a cause they consider right.
For example: the terrorists of September 11th in planes, the immolation by Iranian woman, the Palestinian civilians who explode in Israeli control points. dying for an idea, a cause? I do not know if in France, people should die for an idea, because at the end the worst thing which could happened to them is prison and not death penalty for opposition or life imprisonment which would be the case in so many countries which are still antidemocratic.dying for a fight? I do not believe that the situation of France is serious and inextricable enough to arouse the despair as it could be the case of some who are recruit by currents (as the Palestinians) because they are motivate by the energy of the despair. We can die if we are sure it won't be for nothing, it is easier to die to protect our homeland or somebody in particular, namely, something concrete , that to die for its ideas, its convictions Because to decide to sacrifice ourselves or to risk our lives for an idea, it must certainly be a strength and an amplitude which will have an impact on our lives or which will defend,values we consider noble even after our death, . The opinion is a notion which deserves to be defended, even at the price of our lives, because it allows us to express the deep thoughts and the values we belived in. Few people in France are ready to die for their beliefs, except in extreme cases for example a person who belongs to a sect. We can also take for example the kamikazes (who make it by faith, and not for lack of financial), who dedicate themselves to an unavoidable death to defend an ideology which will influence their era … We can sacrifice our freedom or our lives for love, either for our country. A man who likes his country and who wishes to defend it, if one day he has to go to war, it means he has to sacrifice himself sooner or later, because it's rare that people who go to war stay alive. If we sacrifice our lives for our country, we also sacrifice our family. also for love we can sacrifice our lives or our freedom because sometimes we are afraid of expressing our opinions, we do not want to hurt the person we love. I think that we can sacrifice our lives for a cause such as freedom for our country or another. During the Second World War many immigrants who came from North Africa sacrificed their lives for France so that France is partially released, in particular the Senegalese infantrymen and of North Africa fought for the independence of France. This landing allowed the liberation of Provence. to finish, we can sacrifice our lives for ideas or for diverse reasons, love, justice, morality freedom, equality,religion, or war. But, it is necessary to consider an event first in order to say if it's worth to die for it .