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Il s'agit de réponse aux questions d'ici :

1. "(...) - online, naturally." (l 14). Interpret the author's personal coment.

2. What does it tell us about the journalist’s opinion about the efficiency of
such camps?

3. “Digital Detox” (l.21). Why did the organizers choose such a name? What does it evoke?

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                        Reboot Camp for geeks: no iPads here

In Los Angeles, frazzled tech addicts are going on 'offlining' weekends in the woods
with not a digital cloud in sight.

FOR the 27-year-old Apple designer, known to his companions as Fat
Weasel, the first night in the Californian woods without his iPad was a night-
5 mare. "I keep dreaming Steve Jobs [the late Apple boss] was about to fire me,"
he confessed last week. […]
The self-described nerd has just returned from the first summer camp
organised for Silicon Valley high-flyers who want to escape the smart devices
they helped devise – and then foist on the rest of us.
10 It is part of a burgeoning movement known as "offlining" in which whitecollar
workers shut down smart-phones and Kindles for weeks, days or at least
hours in the battle against the "eye twitch" and "dry mouth" that psychologists
identify as an early sign of net addiction.
Last month's Camp Grounded, held in a Boy Scouts camp among the
15 redwood trees north of San Francisco, sold out weeks in advance – online,
naturally.
The 200 happy campers, who normally spend an average of 16 hours a
day staring at computer screens, were made to hand over all gadgets on
arrival, adopt a silly name and vow not to ask "what do you do?" or think about
20 bosses or deadlines for 36 hours.
According to the organizers, Digital Detox, only a few lost their nerve
and broke away for the nearest internet cafe – even when they were asked to
take part in giggling and breath-holding contests or poetry-reading
performances. […]
25 "There was no booze, either, so nothing to hide behind or regret. I
started making real friends, not just Facebook 'likes'," Fat Weasel boasted,
before adding: "Although I may go onto Facebook to stay in touch."
"Fidget Wigglesworth", camp director, calls it a social experiment about
getting digital and real lives into balance. Yet he admits that when he returns to
30 "real life" as Levi Felix, a Digital Detox founder, he cannot escape Facebook
and Tumblr for long.
There are now 6bn mobile phones in the world, almost as many as there
are people – many of whom, according to a slew of surveys, would rather leave
their spouses than their iPads at home when they go on holiday. […]
35 Yet internet addiction is now an official mental disorder, which in
America means such camps may be categorised as clinics, prompting growing
demand for such cord-cutting or off-lining experiences. […]
John Harlow, The Sunday Times, July 7, 2013

Où j'en suis dans mon devoir

1. For the author, this comment goes to show that anything we do is practically do with internet. Which means, this text explain how to live without internet, while, for example, to work we need internet.

2. The journalist’s opinion show that internet addiction is like alcohol addiction which allow to away from the stresses of daily life. And to treat this disease, there are a special camp as Digital Detox.

3. Digital Detox refers to a cure for alcohol or drugs. However it is a cure without “technologies”.