Derniere partie anglais

Sujet du devoir

bonjour dans mon dernier sujet vous m'aviez dit que j'avais fait du hors sujet mais la j'ai refait pouvez-vous corriger mes erreurs svp :

My ideal city would be eco-friendly. There would be a lot of green places as parks... Everyone would respect the environment, throwing their rubbish in a bin instead of in the street. I would like to live in a city where it would be sunny most of the time. People would be polite. Prices would be cheap. There would have a train network, buses... so it would be easy to go everywhere at every moment. Also, the city shouldn't be too big, so we could walk or ride a bike.
It would be nice to privilege public transport. Indeed, less car means less pollution, less trafic jam and problems to park, which would make everybody happier. Nowadays, in Paris, there isn't so many buses due to traffic jam and there is just one bus an hour. People who are going to work are always late. Moreover, they don't sleep well because every morning, they are awakened with noises of klaxon. So, the problems of transport in Paris are one of the main points that should be changed in order to make life more pleasant.