Expression Ecrite sur une chanteuse (épreuve sujet libre)

Sujet du devoir

Bonjour, J'ai bientôt mon bac d'anglais (oral). Et j'aimerais savoir si Vous pouviez me corriger mon sujet. Merci de votre aide! Au revoir! :)

Où j'en suis dans mon devoir

Hello I’m going to speak about Emilie autumn, my favorite singer.
She was born on the 22 September 1979 in Malibu, she’s an American singer. She plays violin (classical, “electric”) and piano. She creates her own musical univers.
She calls it “violindustrial” it’s a mix of violin and industrial. Or can call her music style Victoriandustrial (word creates from Victorian and Industrial).
She writes her own songs and has even released a book of poetry.
She began to sing in 2001 with the album “Enchant”.
She write a song for 11september 2001victimes of attacks, who are called “Chambermaid” and “By the sword”.
Until 2004 she is in her “Enchant” period after 2004 she is in “Ophielac” in tribute of her song that has the same name. This song is about Ophelie the character creates by Shakespeare.
The Album Opheliac is the representation of a large change in the artist's life, probably due to a suicide attempt she will go to a mental hospital where she can’t get out until a week without being able to give news to anyone. This is probably where that cames his fascination with the Victorian asylums.
After this album “Welcome The Asylum” has become his motto.
Her inspirations are Victoria’s period, England, industrial revolution, the psychiatry and asylum.
She came twice in France 3times 2004-2008-2010
My favorite song of this singer is “The art of Suicide” and “dead is the new alive”, the first is a sad song in classic style of music and the second is in hard rock music style.
I discovered this artist by chance when I surf on the net and I immediately much appreciated... she is a really pretty woman and she is a quite strange by clothing style during and makeup his concerts.
That’s all if you have any question let’s go.